Rydia

I think it's a beautiful piece of none fiction and very well written. More description of the setting would have been nice but there really isn't much wrong with it. ...

Hi there! As this is the literary forum, I'll refrain from critiquing the drawing too much but I think her arms are a little too long and the right goes ...

I like the rhythm and rhyme you have here but I think it needs to be expanded and tidied up. You had a few mistakes, it was lacking in grammar ...

This is a good poem Via, if only because it inspires so many different opinions and it's open to so many interpretations. But I like it for more than that. ...

I really like this poem! Very amusing and certainly easy to relate to. I agree that a more standard rhythm would benefit it though . Here's a few suggestions - ...

I like this Azila. You have some beautiful description and the atmosphere is well set but I think it could be stronger. You need to take into account all five ...

Hi there Twit, just realised that you're rather low on time for making edits to this so I suppose I can stay up a little longer. I like what you ...

It is quite amusing but I think it could have been more imaginative. It starts off as an extension on the whole 'the dog ate my homework' excuse which didn't ...

I think this would benefit if you used standard punctuation (Capitals for starts of new sentences etc) but generally it's pretty good. You have a nice rhythm, some effective rhyme ...

I have a mixed opinion on this part, dear. I think you need to add just a touch more personality so that the reader can attach themselves to your narrator. ...

Hello Via! You have a good start here but the detached tone started to irritate me a little. I can see that it's essential to get the facts across without ...

I like this chapter. Some excellent action, nice descriptions and good dialogue. The portrayal of Meg is better too though you do still need to work on the other characters ...

I think you had some lovely imagery but the theme of the poem is a bit over-used and you don't seem to make a decisive point. It starts off about ...

I'm not quite so fond on this part. You info dump a lot and Meg's becoming a bit too much of an angsty teen. Try not to have such long ...

Hello again! I like the action you have and Meg's a very welll established character but I think you need to add a little more description. For example, rather than ...