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Sure, post it. As a new topic, though. Like "My Falling Sun: Chapter 2".

"The Distance Between Us" by Bart Yates There's just no question about it. Yates made a masterpiece with this novel.

Wolf sex? I did not just spend 30 minutes reading bestiality.

Please. Rate. Your. Stuff. Please. It was thoroughly disturbing. And I'm 16. Imagine how it may look to a 13-year-old. Rate it. Seriously. Plus, I didn't get all the space? ...

"2.) How old is the girl in this? She doesn't seem like an adult. It is kind of creepy in that sense." Tala, it's not a girl. It's a boy. ...

It's much better, but there is still a motherlode of grammar/spelling mistakes and that kind of turns me off. Be careful about the grammar next time. The flashback was a ...

Probably the weirdest book is The Da Vinci Code. The plot turned out stellar, but as it progressed, it got just mind-scrambling and at the end, I wasn't really sastified. ...

This is very good! I like the deaf characters part! Probably because I'm deaf myself... But the paragraphs are HUGE chunks. Split some up. Have variety in the length. This ...

This is so freaking awesome! I don't read much fantasy, but this really caught my eye. It's a wonderful premise. I love the concept of "entering" the head and all ...

I agree with Bella also. Change the font and space out the paragraphs. It gave me a headache to be honest.

Fantastic piece of poetry. I loved your use of poetic elements and the reptetion. There is really nothing that the others haven't covered. All in all, I just loved it. ...

Very good! I loved it! The only problem is that it didn't really make sense. But if that was your goal, then it may turn the reader off rather than ...

Okay, everyone...BREATHE! What's up with all the WRITE MORE reviews. This isn't FictionPress. Also, I edited it a bit. One character's name is now Steven White. I promised one friend ...

This is pretty good. Everything that I can see that's wrong has been pointed out by Vernon, Mizz and Summerless. (Good job guys :D)

It was very good except for a common mistake "your" should be you're. Good job!