Rosewood

Aw, this was such a heartwarming story! (I may come back later to give it a full review)

Oh, sorry, I messed that up! I meant 'derr-ragons'.

I did know about your OSDD/DID, and that is what I immediately thought of when reading about your MC. I'm glad you guys decided to portray that in a book, ...

Honestly, this is better than one my art teacher made in ten hours. (And she only did two objects!)

Ah, I see you hadn't known I posted about this. I don't think I will continue the book on this platform. At least, not in the foreseeable future. Sorry about ...

I agree! I've had the problem with run-ons too, and it takes me a few times to get the worst out. As for the pacing, I understand your pain. I've ...

Thanks! This was for a school assignment so I couldn't make it too long. If it were just me, I definitely would slow it down.

Thank you, this was entirely helpful! I usually struggle with the first few chapters, so I hope my writing begins to even out soon.

I see, thank you! While pointing out grammar mistakes is definitely helpful, my real concern was the actual plot. I happen to know everything after this chapter, but getting through ...

I really did not like this chapter, no matter what I tried to fix it. Any and every bit of help is greatly appreciated!

I definite see your points in most of these - so thank you! As for one of your concerns, this is the longer path she takes home just to see ...

Thanks for your feedback!

Okay... I'm finally here... I agree with Elinor, the setting of 1915 feels somewhat wrong. I know you're considering changing it to be more modern, and I hope you choose ...

Hey Matthew, I'll be back to review this later... after school... you know the deal...

I get you - thanks!