this is really descriptive! I love the first two sentences! But the second one...I think could be improved.
"Perhaps not the grin the curls up the sides of your face, etc."
first off it should be "that" before curls instead of "the",
also, the word curls just doesn't sound right to me. It reminds me of the Chesire cat's smile from Alice in wonderland. Maybe something more like,
Perhaps not the grin that spreads up the sides of your face, or Perhaps not the grin that crawls up your face. Not the best suggestions, but you catch my drift.
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