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Ooo, I love the suspense that builds up here! Although this chapter is very short, it contains everything we need to know. I only have one question: if the bakery ...

1) What's your initial reaction to the chapter? It's very funny and makes me smile because of Finn and Marcel's little sibling arguments. 2) What did you like best? The ...

Hi there! Ok, I remember where we left off with chapter one. So, it seems the monster is called Miss Shrike? That wasn't too clear for me, but I assume ...

Hmm.... very interesting. I'll review this with the YWS S'more Method. Top graham cracker: A monster discovers a little girl freezing in the snow and tries to help her. Slightly ...

Oh my! What a sad ending for Helen. I'll review this with the YWS S'more method. Top graham cracker: Helen and her family let a girl named Lucille sleep over ...

Hi! I know I'm around 14 years late, but I figured everyone deserves a review, so I'll make mine extra long. I'll also review it using the YWS S'more Method. ...

Hi! I'll be reviewing your work with the YWS S'more Method! Top Graham Cracker: A girl named Helena seems very depressed because she accidentally killed her mom and brother in ...

I feel like you used the phrase "I hate you" a lot. Maybe try something else, like "I loathe" or "I despise." Just a tip. This letter doesn't give me ...

At first, I didn't expect this to go anywhere, but wow oh wow it's written very nicely! The way you described the tree growing was awesome. The ending feels mysterious, ...

Ooh, this is very fun to read! Rosemary is quite the eccentric character when it comes to her appearance. For some reason I got Shakespeare vibes here. I'm not sure ...

I agree with noridori, we have no idea what is with the fae. They seem to have taken over since Alwin's time (I read the prologue), but we only get ...

One word: wow! I love the characters and the rising suspense, now all I want to know is what happens to Alwin! This is a very good prologue; you described ...

This artwork is very good. Besides the kaleidoscope, did you use coloring pages for it or did you draw it yourself? My favorite picture is the one of the hummingbird. ...

Hi there! This paragraph is amazing! First of all, you described everything very well. I can clearly picture Korin in his winter coat trudging through the snow. Second, it's got ...

Hi! This book had a lot of great ideas. I love the whole "new world" concept. However, I did notice that you start a new paragraph after almost every sentence. ...