RoryLegend

God created Adam and Eve. Not Adam and Steve. I don't know if that was meant to be funny but I pretty much died laughing when I read that. It ...

You definatly drew me in with your style of writing. I like. Keep it up. Now, there were probably grammatical errors and things, but I am so bad at grammar ...

Nicely done. I didn't get the title until I realized towards then end that all of the other people considering suicide are stopped by someone, therefore they get a blank ...

What the heck! I'm so jealous of your writing skills! I really liked the narrator. His character was very well developed and deep in a way that you didn't have ...

Hm, this was definatly interesting. I like the angle you are going for with the story and how it never really happens the way it did in the books and ...

Personally, I like this one more. I think they are both really great but I think this one flows better and has more to the story. It still had that ...

Whoa dude, deep, deep stuff. Don't take this in the wrong way because it is meant as a compliment, I feel like this would be one of those poems that ...

My eyelids slightly ajar before the flew open Is the above "the" supposed to be they? Grammatically this poem needed some help. You don't really have any punctuation at all, ...

Haha this was great. It is very refreshing to read soemthing that is both smart and interesting at the same time. You did this very very well. I was a ...

This was really good. It is definatly a really sad story. i like that you didn't need to write paragraphs and paragraphs to explain what was going on and to ...

Hello! You silly goose you! This poem is wonderful. Its short and sweet and to the point. I like short poems because sometimes long poems can just become a big ...

Whoa, you just blew me away. And you are only thirteen! Jeez! I'm so jealous of your mad writing skills. That was really deep and really touching. It flowed nicely ...

Yay! First critique. You really left me wanting to know what the heck she wrote down on that post it note! That is the mark of a good writer, leave ...

Maybe she's like the little ones You see all the time on TV, Their skin so thin, their bones so sharp, You turn away so you don't have to see. ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! I really enjoyed this. This is really twisted but I like it. It's not your typical love story or murder story, it's phsycotic. I like it ...