Riedawriter23

This was awesome! Great description and the ending really had me wanting more. I do however want to know what it is your narrator is killing. Could it be people, ...

First of all, full of feeling. I cried reading this and that doesn't happen very often. I also loved the way you put it into second person, great addition and ...

Okay, I did NOT expect the convulsing. lol. Good job on the surprise element. And poor Wyes, if it wasn't bad enough that he was alone, now he has this ...

I really liked this, especially the way you divided it. All the descriptions and analogies were really good. My favoirte was the one for Dolor because, first it was the ...

Lol, this sounds awesome already. Great character developement, I already want to know more about them. "You're just jealous," I laugh, standing up to leave. "I bet you offer him ...

I'm glad to hear that Jon and Kyle aren't looking for anyone right now. Though, Trent is such a cute little character, he's nothing compared to Kyle. :). And that ...

I wish I can (could) turn around, So I can (could) look away and couldn't see the ground. There lay the scar of how hard I've hit,(the scar of how ...

I liked this poem. The only thing I saw wrong was the lack of punctuation. The whole entire poem was three sentences so it read a little awkward. Other than ...

I like the rhyme in this but the rhyme in the last stanza seems forced. Saw and All don't really rhyme that well and the last line was a bit ...

lol, most of the things I was going to say have already been pointed out so I'm just going to comment on this. I loved the repetition and even just ...

when you look right me. **Should be when you look right AT me. This poem is really cliche is all. The beginning lines have been used so often that even ...

This was a really beautiful poem. I could actually feel something from this even though it was quite simple. The overall meaning of it though kind of took over. Very ...

This is one of my favorites. The beginning was just so beautiful and I could really see it. I do think that this belongs in narrative poetry but not as ...

I really liked this! Very descriptive and great meaning and imagery. The only part that I didn't understand was when you said the grass turned a sickly green. It's just ...

I don't know, I think I got the wrong impression at first. Lol, at first it was a guardian angel, totally innocent and then it turned into an unrequited love. ...