Riedawriter23

I didn't understand all of the parts, mostly the end, but the beginning was very nice and descriptive. The only part that I REALLY didn't get was: the fields are ...

I like this poem. It's very straight forward. Though the way the lines are structured makes it read sort of awkward, like the last three lines for instance. The idea ...

I do like this. To me though it's a lot of telling, even for a freeverse. You CAN add imagery into freeverse which would have done wonders for this poem. ...

This poem was a lot of telling and not enough imagery. You did have good description but other than that it felt a little soapy. The fact that the narrator ...

This was really good, the explanation wasn't even needed. :) The description and imagery were very nice. The only thing you need to work on is punctuation. There was nothing ...

I agree, the concept is good but the lack of puntuation and sometimes grammar is a little bothersome. The simplicity of this is really nice though. I almost like how ...

I do like the simplicity of it all but I can't really feel anything from it. It's sort of more a statement than anything. Though, I do get it and ...

I think poems such as these need to be looked deep into, really if you "uncode" every line the meaning is right there and you're like "ah...I get it. That's ...

I do like this poem and it's idea but I think that adding more description would help it a lot. It's a lot of telling and you can't get any ...

I agree the "My True Love" bit did come into the poem way too much. If you possibly kept it in one line and then found substitutes for the other ...

This was very good. I love the description mostly. My favorite part: Why were we here, with our eyes closed, when rainclouds press the horizon? The only thing I don't ...

I loved this. The rhyme was beautiful and I didn't ever see it forced. Also it wasn't too descriptive or lacking description. The end was awesome. :) Great job on ...

I really like this. My favorite one was the third version of the poem. The Seventeen lifejackets and eighteen people bit worked a lot better in that form. The end ...

I really like this! The description was good and the characters grew nicely. The only problem that I saw that hasn't been addressed already is that you use the names ...

I like this. I really understood it. The only problem is that with every comment from your characters you left the "she said." or "she replied" within the quotation marks ...