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I read this book! I thought it was really good, too. I can't wait for more from Khaled Houssini.

Ok first of all why LOTUS? Because it's about a lotus :) lol but more in depth, it is about a lotus seed resting in the earth 'underneath layer upon ...

The work is very raw and simple. I like it, but I feel that it could be dramatized a little. If this could be used as a frame to set ...

That is really beautiful; I would leave it just the way it is. You have developed a very strong voice and style. Good work.

It doesn't sound finished to me. It just seemed to cut short, when there was so much more you could have said to make it better. I've nothing against short ...

Yes, I certainly agree with Blue Haze. That was a truly powerful and moving piece. The emotions presented are very, very strong. Great job!

I just wanted to say how brilliant your rhythm and flow is! I read it out loud, and the words just slipped off my tongue. It flows so perfectly that ...

If you have more, you should post them. Okay, here goes ... (shakes as he has big expectations to live up to) Bird Innocent songbird your notes pierce the tumbling ...

I thought that was absolutely beautiful. When you read it, you can almost feel as if you've been to this island before, like its a part of you. Your imagery ...

xanthan gum, you amaze me! I've read other poems you've written on the forums and they're absolutely brilliant! This one was definately no exception. Keep writing, please!

Wow, that is a really good poem! I really like your use of imagery, it's very powerful. Honestly, I don't think theres anything I would change. Good work, and keep ...

I think your poem has good potential and good meaning, but I have a suggestion. You use some words that are kind of cliche, like 'scumbag', or 'bum'. In poetry, ...