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I liked the first three stanzas. It almost sounded like tbe beginning of a good song, but then the quality gradually began to drop from there.

I don't think anyone could have chosen a more insulting word to describe this than "cute."

Well, that was depressing. A little choppy for my tastes, but you did get the point across very well.

Tee hee. I hear ya.

Meh. You don't have to like a book to discuss it.

I was thinking of posting a longer version of this story. Just wanted to know if anyone would be interested in reading it.

It wasn't so much innocence as ignorance. Her being naked had nothing to do with sexuality anyway. By that point, she was mad. Also, something I forgot to say before, ...

Perhaps this belongs in the "Other" section, but it really was quite funny. Exactly what you expect from a creative, talented ten-year-old.

At this stage in the game, it's not really necessary to do revisions. When you're still learning, it's better to write as many stories as you can, rather than focus ...

It's an okay start, but it didn't convey the feelings very strongly, either because you didn't understand them properly or because you were holding back. Try delving into the emotions, ...

I'm not sure I quite understand who "you" is in this, but it was a lovely piece. A very enjoyable read.

Fine as a piece of randomness, but not much of a poem. Poetry this short if not an easy thing to write, and needs way more than a couple of ...

You've got some unique ideas and interesting images. But for all that, it felt very bland and the emotions didn't seem real to me.

Yeah, I know. I just see young writers go on and on about whether not something is cliched or not and treat common ideas as though they were venomous snakes. ...

Anyone who tells me my work is cliched will have their nose bitten off. I don't care about that, and it really annoys me when people obsess about how original ...