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Dinner: An interior monologue

by Rei


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Sun Jun 26, 2005 11:06 pm
Crysi says...



Wow, this is good. Really powerful, and that is how thoughts go when you're worried about something..




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Sun Jun 26, 2005 10:03 pm
Sam says...



The last bit about the lumps made me crack up...if that's not what you want, better change it. :lol:




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Sun Jun 26, 2005 5:29 pm
Rei says...



Yeah, I know. I just see young writers go on and on about whether not something is cliched or not and treat common ideas as though they were venomous snakes. I don't believe in avoiding cliches. I believe in playing with them for all they're worth and doing the best I can with whatever ideas work for what I am trying to do. All I care about is quality of execution.

But thank you for your thoughts, and for pointing out the typo.




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Sun Jun 26, 2005 5:19 pm
DarkerSarah says...



I wasn't being negative, really. It was just a thought of mine on the piece.




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Sun Jun 26, 2005 5:00 pm
Rei says...



Anyone who tells me my work is cliched will have their nose bitten off. I don't care about that, and it really annoys me when people obsess about how original an idea is.




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Sun Jun 26, 2005 4:46 pm
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I thought this idea was a little cliche, but it was extremely well executed. The stream of conscienceness was very well done, and very believeable.

There was a typo at the beginning:

Jamie, get off me shoulder


Should be "my shoulder." Sorry, I'm anal.

-Sarah




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Sat Jun 25, 2005 2:05 pm
Shadow Knight says...



Interesting, not bad. It confused me a little, but it's good, I lost track of who was who in some parts, but other than that it's fine.





There is nothing more radical or counter-cultural, at the moment, than laying down one’s cynicism in favour of tender vulnerability.
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