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This whole starting at the ending very rarely works. In my personal opinion, they are always very cheesie. Besides, how can we ask a question like when we know nothing ...

TBR got all the grammar stuff. The idea is all right, though it could use some more narrative detail. There were a couple of things that did annoy me, though. ...

Usually, it's not the best thing to switch from third-person to first like that. It only works some of the time, and when you do that, you need to make ...

Wow, you've got two Canadian authors up there. I haven't read read any of those books, but I have read books by Korman and Oppel. Even got to meet Oppel ...

Yeah, I thought it was okay as well, but nothing stood out for me other than the fact that you don't know the friend's name. It's okay if we don't ...

Yeah, the repeativeness and improper use of "your" got on my nerves as well. However, I can tell that you are improving. I am in complete agreement with Sam about ...

I once put my class into shock just because I burped. It was right after lunch and I had just had drink. I tend to swallow a lot of air ...

There are actually only two or three members here who are under thirteen. But that shouldn't matter. I only read the first few sentences and they turned me off completely. ...

Well, there's a nice welcome from Griffin. However, I do feel inclined to agree with him on just about everything he said. But vampires are allowed to use weapons. They ...

YAY! someone else who writes while he's supposed to be paying attention. I wrote half of my first novel in school. Which makes you wonder how I managed to do ...

Definitely, trying too hard almost always curses a story. There wasn't anything in particular that stood out about this for me. Snoink seems to have gotten most of it. I ...

My reccomendadtion for this is to get a thesaurus. It's a decent start, and you play with tone pretty well, but you use words more than oncewhen you could easily ...

I like both. But I guess Tolkien was a little too long winded at times. You don't really need most of the background mythology and history he includes. Then again ...

No, it doesn't make much sense, but then I haven't been reading it. Although it is kind of amusing. But then I'm not really interested in humourous writing. However, I ...

Yeah, you worked with tone and atmosphere very well. This was also one case where not knowing the guy's name really worked for me. Usually when I see that, I ...