Ray112

Okay well, I think what you've got here is pretty cool. In the the first two stanza's the poem's about how much the speaker wants to forget his/her lover. I'm ...

Okay I like where you're going here and this poem has some good points about it for example I don't know if you did this by accident or intended, but ...

With all respect to Truth's view, I didn't get this poem. But the use of imagery and description are the high points in it. A lot of people have trouble ...

Actually I think I get it. The each of the lines in the first stanza relate to the lines in the second stanza i.e. where it says searching the world ...

This is a nice poem. It reminds me of a lot of the stuff I'm going through. Anyway, good poem. On the third line of the first stanza I feel ...

Well for starters yea I'm gonna agree with the guy's post above me. You need to split those HUGE paragraphs up they're scary. Anyway, when you revise your writing's you ...

I like this, it's a pretty cool story so far. I feel like I'd like it a little better if I read a little more. My only advice is that ...

OKay, I liked this story so I'd figure i'd try dissecting it for ya. Those two before me pretty much chewed all the meat off this bone but i'll give ...

I like this poem. It seems to tell a story. I can imagine the speaker trapped in a prison. I imagine that the prison's more figurative than tangent. Maybe the ...

Umm, well hey Roy. I just want to say to start with that you have a good idea going right now,but the problem is that at the moment the story ...