Ravenna

beautiful. i totally understand. though it was good...i might reconsider the way you broke the lines up. was a bit awkward because i don't really think a pause fit at ...

Oh everything is amazing now. This all ended quite a while ago but unfortunately I still remember these things I described. I haven't shown it to my mother yet, but ...

Well actually if you MUST know, I editted ambition because I realized that lack of puncuation just kind of ruins everything. Haha. Hey you learn something new every day.

Ahh yes you understood it. *smiles* Finally some intelligence in this world. haha between you and me, my parents didn't understand it. Whatever. =] The whole significance of the 2nd ...

...lack of rhyme?....I suppose that's the definition of free-verse, eh?

While I appreciate your critique, I haven't yet showed this to anyone who couldn't grasp it's meaning. My lack of punctuation is due to poetic license. I don't puncuate...ever. And ...

Thanks for the comments. I meant it's pulled stiffly back by unseen pins in the way that when you go outside when it's windy, if you have the dress on ...

Okay I didn't know if you'd get it or not. Anyways. Everything's basically frozen in time. The dress is just flapping in the wind but it's in a photograph so ...

1 word: wow. No seriously, that was amazing. Very deep and symbolic. I liked it alot. And I can't really critique because there's nothing wrong with it. Which is rare. ...

Writing this one was kind of funny. I got absorbed in my own writing and that has never happened before. Hmmmm.....intriguing. And I know what you mean about the heathen ...

R&R please

LOL I'm trying to find it. Something went wrong with the middle part of the story, like the beginning was good but the plot was getting twisted around and even ...

It's very well-written. A bit on the scary side but I'm almost positive you meant it that way. I love it. You might not want to put those things you ...

Thanx Sam and Niteowl, and Firestarter, I never heard a poem at all similar too this so I'm not aware that I was plagiarizing or...'cliche-ing' as you may. I thought ...

Thanks everybody. I wrote it a while ago and just pulled it out again so now I'll edit and maybe send it somewhere (?) It's too sinister to let my ...