Rascalover

Woah!!! What emotion! Amazing portraying of what I can tell is going to be an awesome story! Charaters: arions stubborness, determination, and will is so right for that character. Like ...

Emotion: Ok so I think the emotion isn't as strong as it could be. Not to the effect that I would cry. His force of stubborness and mystery could be ...

springrain2693 once again has beat me to fixing grammatical errors. But oh my what suspense!!!!!!!!!!! your great at action pack stories. Such mind pictures, wow, great job! She began, “Misusage ...

Because in the review above they fixed your grammatical errors I wont go over them, thus being redundant. I skimmed the other chapters which were very entertaining, and I have ...

I didn't dislike this story nor love it. Thats because it's just not my kind of story, so I'll try and not be biased in my review. leo as a ...

First of all I think this is an amazing start to your story, and it wasn't confusing to the least bit. Your descriptions with out sight ironically gives off the ...

Very portraying of the Raven character, which was lovely. Each time I read about her or her speaking she becomes less montrous and more human-like. And each time i think ...

Once again I am loving this story, such uniqueness. There's something so raw about the Raven. The way you have describe her cloud watching is that of sheer talent. Most ...

Wow such talent Your descriptions are acurate and percise, not lengthy and boring. Gilberts reaction is almost unfathomable (is that a word ahah) its so weird as you describe the ...

errtu2 reveiw was excellent for such a poem. I too don't do much grammatical errors in poetry, so sorry. I fairly enjoyed this poem. it has such deep meaning that ...

i think all of your critques above have pointed out some editing you need to do, but all in all I thought the first chapter to be interesting and very ...

Hello, i really enjoyed this story! There are some minor changes that should be made but hey nothings ever perfect :) But it would really be easier to read if ...

I like this alot Its very creative. Good job. now Im not really sure but itsn't this like a free style form of poetry? Any who I like the message ...

Oh my gosh when I first read this I was like is this true? Wow what an amazing writer you are! kudos to you for fooling me. I think you ...

Perhaps this is a moment when wrong becomes right My shadow makes me feel like a taller man His wide arms silhouetting a braver pose than I could hold Her ...