Rainheart

Okay. Yeah. This is going to be a short review because honestly... there's nothing to review. Where's the details? Descriptions of the city? All you have is dialogue. Sure, there ...

I agree with Loose. This is more of a prologue than a short story! Most short stories don't spend half as much time explaining a back story as you did. ...

So. This chapter started off a bit confusing. Maybe even a tad bit boring. But it got better when the dad told Tasia about how he met his wife. I ...

Hiiiee:) Of course, this is good. Yep. That's about all I can say. Can't wait for more chapters. Who's in the house, btw? Have you written that chapter yet? If ...

So, I wasn't quite sure what to expect from this. I've read a lot of chapters written by various authors. Some were good. Other's were terrible. All had to do ...

So. I read this. And basically, I have the same complaints as everyone else. Grammar is terrible. There's basically no way for me to write down *all* the spelling mistakes. ...

Hey! You joined! As I've said and will say again.... love this first chapter. Even though Thomas isn't actually in it, I'm still able to get a good idea of ...

How old is Tasia? It may have been mentioned in the first chapter and I overlooked it. I'm thinking she's younger. If so, she seems a lot older. At least ...

Forgetting about all the grammar and punctuation mistakes, this was pretty good. The suspense was pretty well written, as was the emotions Brittany felt after hearing about the loss of ...

I love fantasies. They're the best. You can create a different world and not bother with any rules that aren't your own. Details are my thing, and apparently they're yours ...