RainbowCereal

I really like your sense of humor, for starters XD This was a really cool idea and I like where you went with it, especially the bits with Johnny's Soul ...

Oh my absolute goodness. I'd be a liar if I said I weren't jealous. I loved your choice in vocabulary. It put an interesting picture in my mind and encouraged ...

First off, just let me say that you did a fabulous job. It flowed smoothly, there weren't any distracting errors, and I was pleasantly surprised that I was being discouraged ...

Oh my goodness gracious. XD I really like your sense of humor; I laughed despite the rather depressing poem I'd just finished reading. That's great. All I really see wrong ...

The only thing that really bothers me about this is the capitalization, or lack thereof. I don't know if that had been intentional or not (I'm no poetic expert), but ...

This was really cool! You have a really unique style of writing that's hard to come across and enough skill to take it and transport your reader into the story ...