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Re: Blood and Silver Ch. One
QuietQuilla desu! This is a good intro, but don't you think things happened kind-of fast . . . ? The intro, I feel, is the most critical detail portion of ...
Apr 2, 2014 -
Re: DON'T PANIC
QuietQuilla desu! Okay, it's gonna take me a while to understand this, but I love it. I love the way the sentences do sort-of make sense together and smashed well. ...
Apr 2, 2014 -
Re: the absence of sound
QuietQuilla desu! At first, I was like, "Why all lowercase?" But then I got it; it totally fit the atmosphere. "but after walking into his room to find him facedown ...
Apr 2, 2014 -
Re: When'ere I Think of Thee
QuietQuilla desu! I really like this poem. "By the quaking of my knee And the quickened heart's pace." The expressions of this poem is breathtaking and so far I have ...
Apr 2, 2014 -
Re: Life or Death? Chapter 2- Preparations to Leave
QuietQuilla desu! Again, absolutely loving the story line here, but the lack of detail still shouting at me. The diction the characters use is a bit stiff or explanatory, which, ...
Mar 31, 2014 -
Re: Life or Death? Chapter 1- How do I Overcome this Past?
QuietQuilla desu! Interesting, I really like this so far. I love the introduction as much as any other part, because it grabs the attention of the reader. Your main character ...
Mar 31, 2014 -
Re: Alone
QuietQuilla desu! Okay, I liked this and couldn't stop until I finished reading it. But, I really don't like the lack of detail in the story. It's strait to the ...
Mar 26, 2014 -
Re: How about...NO!!!!
QuietQuilla desu! Okay, I really like this. The punctuation bothered me a bit; but in all it was a # star work of art. Now, I am about to attempted ...
Mar 25, 2014 -
Re: Dream Father
QuietQuilla desu! Overwhelming, I loved this. "Dream Father, I saw your fire and thought it insanity For the colours of your fire Showed us that the world like a proud ...
Mar 24, 2014 -
Re: My Cat Ana
QuietQuilla desu! Alright, I really like this, though it was a bit sad and dark. I mean talk about a cat tell someone that 'playing with knives' will make them ...
Mar 24, 2014 -
Re: The Whisperer's Story (part two)
QuietQuilla desu! I just had to say this is awesome! Not knowing gives the mind endless thoughts or suggestions of the future, and I love that. I also love how ...
Mar 21, 2014 -
Re: The Whisperer's Story
QuietQuilla desu! Whoa, this is so good I'm miss typing every word i retype! As soon as I started reading the story pulled me in, I had no choice afterword ...
Mar 21, 2014 -
Re: The Last Breath of Fire Chapter 1 Draft 1
QuietQuilla desu! I really liked this chapter, but I feel as if you skipped over words or detail that was key to bringing your readers in. The diction is a ...
Mar 20, 2014 -
Re: Used To It
QuietQuilla desu! Whoa, this was saddening in a great way. Um, at first I was a little confused because I thought the main character was being called "demon" but after ...
Mar 20, 2014 -
Re: Words
QuietQuilla desu! I like the subtle anger in this write. ( subtle doesn't look right, but I looked it up and supposedly it is!! Who would've though it'd look so ...
Mar 20, 2014
