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Re: Character-lessness
Yes, yes it is. Amazing. I love everything about this. The title caught my attention, and the facinating subject kept it and didn't let it go. Questions kept popping up ...
Dec 31, 2013 -
Re: The Battle Of Marathon, And The AfterMath Pt. 1
MORE! I love the subject, and the historical details stick with what I learned in sixth grade. I'm not one to go and research about it for the review just ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: enchantia 2
I really hate to say it, but you need to fix those typos. I can usually read through them, but you need to help out here. Punctuation, spelling, and spaces ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: Hey Mister
I must admit to going into this with little faith it would be any good. But I was proven wrong. If you were to change anything change the opening paragraph. ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: .
While I certainly would like to review, I simply can't. The story caught my attention with it's sense of humor and writing style, and the same things kept me reading. ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: Plus Wind - Prologue
Hey there! Welcome to YWS! Here for a quick little review. Since there really isn't much story in this little bit, I'm going to focus on the flow of your ...
Nov 27, 2013 -
Re: Carnival of Monsters
Heyo! Here to review! I liked the setting and the way the magic and creatures and such flowed together, but the story itself is kinda... cold. There really isn't much ...
Nov 4, 2013 -
Re: The Masked
Chilling. This is perfect for the October mood, with everyone getting ready for Hollows' Eve Night. There was one line that kinda stood out, though. The last one. Firstly, the ...
Sep 23, 2013 -
Re: The Aelfgar Wars, Pt 3
Taking this review paragraph-by-paragraph. First: The only thing that could improve this part would be making it smoother. The transition from the surroundings to describing the orb was a little ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: Through the Eyes of a Monster
Wow. Just... Wow. This is really cool. I love mythology, especially the story of Beowulf. So setting it in Grendel's point of view really grabs my attention. I've done stories ...
Aug 7, 2013 -
Re: Genie
Wow. I am going to ignore the grammatical and punctuation errors in favor of this was really really good. Fantastic. It took me a moment to realize the setting, but ...
Jul 26, 2013 -
Re: The Aelfgar Wars, Pt 2
"...and signaled my dragon to..." YOUR DRAGON? YOUR DRAGON!?! FOOL, DRAGONS ARE NOT OWNED!!! Other than that, great story. Some paragraphs seemed like run-ons, but I think you know what ...
Jul 14, 2013 -
Re: Incoherent Plea of The Possessed
Well done. This was very interesting to read. Usually I focus on the story elements when I review, but for this one I think I'll stick with the other stuff. ...
Jul 14, 2013 -
Re: Ragdoll
Welcome to YWS! I am reviewing as I read each paragraph, so stick with me. "She loved her friends" seems unnecessary, as you say in the next line, "Her favorite ...
Jul 13, 2013 -
Re: [Refrain]
If this is not a song do not read any of this review. It read like a rap song, so that's how I'm reviewing it. If it is just a ...
Jul 13, 2013
