Qoh16

This was interesting. I thought the description was really good. I could picture everything in my head. You are right though, the chapter is a little slow. But I'll bear ...

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww. This was so cute. I loved that it was the story of a ball of yarn. I had to something similar for English class. I couldn't really find anything ...

Omg. This was so powerful. And I so can relate. I've been in abusive relationships myself. But the one thing I had a problem with was the MC, she didn't ...

This was confusing for me. But I did think this was funny. Other that, I have nothing to say. Good Luck. Keep Writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Ok, so I thought this was very interesting. There is nothing I can really critique. Keep up the good work. This a great job. Keep writing. Good luck!!!! :) ~Qoh16

This was a really good start, but I noticed a few spelling mistakes. But everyone else has too. So I won't be a repeat. But this is a really good ...

Sis!!! I love this so much. I could really feel the emotion, that this came from the heart. I love it. And I know she will love it too. Keep ...

This has great potential. The title doesn't fit this story too well. You need to put more emotion into and description. And also think about structuring the paragraphs differently so ...

WHOA!!! I thought you were talking about me for a sec, I saw myself so plainly it was scary. I know how you feel when you get to that place ...

Ok, so this is very interesting. But like what everyone else has said, it does need work and have great potential. Try to be more descriptive and put emotion in ...

Ok so I'm not going to do the stupid thing and repeat whatever one else says, that's a waste and ulitmately doesn't help you. Despite the cliches and there were ...

This poem is...I have no words for it. Thats not a bad thing. Not by any means. I've been trying to think of a title. And what I have so ...

I love this sis. There's nothing about this I would change. And I know for a fact "the one you love the most" would love this too. ;) Keep up ...

This was a good story, short and to the point. and not to many words. I am not going to repeat what everyone else said. but other than that. its ...

Oh my jeepers!! Sis I love it!!! We are defientely working on chapter 6 tonight. There were some concerns I had but I will save them for tonight. I know ...