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Hello! :) So I noticed quite a few things when I was reading your story. I'll just talk about some of the main problems I found. Overall, you tend to ...

Hey there! :D Personally, this story was a little melodramatic for my tastes, and I feel like you tried too hard to fit your story with the song lyrics to ...

Overall I thought this was an okay poem. Not great, but not horrible either. However, I felt like your rhyme scheme was forced. For example: But I hope you're happy ...

Honestly, I didn't think this was very good. You obviously have an decent grasp on sentence structure and language, however you seem to use a lot of words that are, ...

Hey!:D Well, I have to say that I agree with everyone else, and that this was probably the best Twilight parody I've read!:D Even though I kind of like Twilight ...

Hey Moo!:D This was a very interesting start to your story. I liked the use of short paragraphs and the language used throughout. I have to agree with the other ...

Hey Moo!:D What happened?!?! :shock: Seriously, I must know now! I liked this, although I felt it was a little bit short. I would like to know more about the ...

Hey there Moo!:D I am really enjoying how this story is developing! The relationship between the two main characters is intriguing, and I want to see more between them as ...

Hey there! :D Well, after receiving your PM, I decided to take a loot at your story. :D This was brilliant! I was on the edge of my seat the ...

This chapter was not too short! I think it was the right length for this part of the story. There was great character development in this chapter, and is it ...

I thought that this poem was great! I cannot imagine how hard it must be living with Tourette's, but this poem gives a wonderful bitter-sweet insight into the thoughts of ...

Hello there!:D Wow, this really caught be by surprise! I, like everyone else, thought it was a human at first, however I loved the twist at the end! This poem ...

Hey there!:D Another great chapter, Moo! Nothing really stood out here, although a few things confused me slightly. You say that Chris and April are in most classes together, except ...

Wow! This story is truly breathtaking! I really enjoy the relationship between Chris and April! They seem like they would go well together :wink: I noticed a few minor errors ...

Hey Moo! This is truly a great piece of writing! I love the build up of tension throughout the story; it makes the reader wish to read on! The only ...