Prosithion

Samara, I thought that this story was very good, short, but good. Plese fix the spacing. It makes it terrible to read. I suggest putting a line space between each ...

Stanzas, PLEASE! It reads like a story, a really short one, but a story none the less. Interesting, but... odd. Even as fiction, I think that this is really a ...

Wow, line up the lines. It makes it hard to read. And set it up into stanzas. The way you have it, it reads too broken up. The statement/question set ...

It's pretty good. Interesting rhyme scheme, with the B rhyme splitting up A. Pretty nifty. Correct me if I'm wrong, because I've been working on AP English Lit for a ...

“Who is to say? For every action there is an equal but opposite reaction. For everything good there is a dark counterpart. It is the only way to maintain balance,” ...

Ok, Incan. I'm disapointed. You are well known on this site for being the God of the Poetry Forums, then you come up with something like this. If you're going ...

Kay, you are a born poet. That was wonderful. There was an obvious rhyme scheme and I liked the beat that you followed. Some of the lines seemed too short ...

I liked this one a lot, although it seemed void of rhythym and rhyme (sorry for the spellings). It seemed sort of unweildy, but the effect that it got across ...

The story was very good, but I think you should pick some simpler names. Reader hate nothing else, but for names they can't pronounce. I'll admit, I have the same ...

There were a few gramaticla errors in this story, but I can ignore them for the quality of this psice. Although it appears very anarchist, it was very well written ...

That was an absolutely wonderful poem. I thought that it got across your feelings very well. The only criticism is that there was no regular beat. The poem seemed to ...

no offense meant, but that was pretty awful. When you've been on here longer, you'll find that I'm a stickler for rhythm. There was none in this poem. PLEASE, I'm ...

Prologue The little gang of kids was not, as any casual observer would think, watching the storyteller. write it this way: The small group of children... use group, cluster or ...

Wiggy! What a lovely poem. That was fantastic. Interesting topic. There were a few grammatical errors that I saw. 1) than - This should be, the or that, I'm supposing. ...

It was good, but RHYME SCHEME! FOLLOW A BEAT!!! It is choppy without a beat to follow. Lose the Ja and the nein . It doesn't work. Just use yes ...