Prosithion

Grammatically, I can't find anything wrong with it, but I don't really like it. The fractured set up makes it just hard to read. I couldn't really get into the ...

At first glance, this seemed like a pretty daunting read, but once I started,I couldn't stop. This was very well written. I especially like the first person perspective. It really ...

well, everyone else gave you a lengthy critique, so I'll keep mine short and sweet. Yea Zombies! I like zombie stories, and this one did not disappoint. However, one thing ...

In short, this has the potential to be brilliant. Now, I love reading sci-fi that makes scientific sense. I mean, I'm no rocket scientist, but I like your science. It ...

First off, I liked it. It has some pretty ingenious rhymes in it. Couple quibbles though. Your lack of punctuation was already addressed, so I'll skip it, other then pointing ...

Overall, I would say that this is a good story, and I like the twist. However, one thing really jumped out at me. If this is a funeral for her ...

I found this poem interesting, but I think that it needs some work. It seems to just wander aimlessly. Maybe try and regiment it a little more. The randomness of ...

Hmm, I love all things zombie, and this shows potential, but I wanted to point out a few things that I noticed. “I am infected,” the woman whispered, her hand ...

Hmm, while I found the idea interesting, I'd have to agree with the other comments. I'll point out some things I noticed. The green creatures, both mobile and immobile, fed ...

hmmm, I like the premise. I'm intrigued as to what happens next, and also, what happened before. A couple of quibbles though. "Captain Gregory Tailgunner," said the vultrino that brought ...

Some thirty miles away from the old suburb where Louis Orson and Peter Corseley had been holding their discussion, in the middle of the vibrant Lendian District of the New ...

The world is a whitewashed gray, and i see through half closed eyes, watching a granite sundial in the shade, and grasping at the sky for a sunrise. For some ...

Lately a strange, almost disquieting sort of feeling had begun to fall upon Zenith. Like Sokool said, since this is the intro to an entire series, you need to make ...

It took me two years to become a postman. To pass the test I had to carry a seventy pound bag of mail and when I first picked it up ...

Gideon walked into the sanitary hospital, his shoes tapping on the bacteria free plastic tiles, leaving mud splotches on the floor. A janitor bot, hummed alive out of the corner ...