Princess

Zomg gurl!!!!!!!! That was grreaatt!!!! the only critique i can give you is that you didnt explain how the soldier died.. its like you almost skipped a verse. but other ...

Okay, I am currently addicted to this book.. Please keep churning out these chapters before i go through withdrawal! :wink: Anyways, I dont really see anything wrong with this chapter, ...

Wow.. This chapter was better than the last...The only thing i can say is that when Lilat did the fake exit thing, can you explain a little more please? how ...

Wow!!!! I loved this story! You are a guy of many talents.. But there is one thing i must point out is that the acid thing, i am currently taking ...

Hey clueless! lol.. I love this poem! you expressed what many people are terrified to say. I admire you for that. :D There is something about this poem that screams ...

Jane’s Animals My shoes clap like a baby’s hands---------------just a bit cliche here as I enter the new house. In San Diego we never had wooden floors and rows of ...

OMG, that was the best story i had ever read! you have lots and lots of skill!!! and as for the name, i think you should either name it Unshed ...

Dude!!!!! thats one great poem, and very creepy. At the very end, you gave me goosebumps! :D you are one heckofa writer!!!! although i didnt like how you based a ...

NEVER EVER beg people to review your work! it draws people away from it, and wont let them read the masterpiece.....okay.. to the critique.. your rhyming is way off.. the ...

This is even better then the second one! seriously, if you ever thought about writing a book, i will help you every way possible. the only thing i found wrong ...

hmmm... these words seem like there sopoesed to have meaning but there too flat.. and this poem is very unique.. you show much understanding about the all for a good ...

Wow that made me want to read more!!! girl you got style!! :smt038 the only thing i found wrong with this story, was that it was waaaaayy to short! you ...

This poem is the best poem I have ever read! :D Keep it up! :smt023

I loved it!!!! :D you are one heckofa writer. the only critique i can give you is that you need more details... but you gave me totall chills!!!!!!!! im still ...

OMG you have some skill!!! when i read that poem i started laughing.. and at the end i was in histerics :lol: you should write a book.. i looooooooved that ...