andiminlovegalore - I hope I spelled your name right, and that 'spelled' is ok to use in that sentence instead of 'spelt' since they are interchangeable here. You are awesome.
I think that 'a' instead of 'the' would definitely be better. I'm a very 'sound-oriented' writer. A lot of the middle is kind-of culture oriented (I like the word oriented today) so I get what you're saying.
Basically, I did just type random things that were going on in my backyard. "Jazz hands' obviously weren't happening unless my dog suddenly became human and I was unaware of it at the time, but I just wanted to create a few images that are quick, in your face, and totally made no sense, but still conveying this sense of a certain society (Yes, Bring It On..)
"Dogs barking at unknown accents" refers to both the animal and people as these feral creatures that just argue/yell at things they don't understand. And its also another ploy to get in the images of this culture (accents are seen as very superior, sophisticated, basically cool here... and I'm sure people will disagree with me on that.)
Runelord-- I don't know how to quote either. haha! The 'I don't know what the 'fifth' is' just is a random way to say that the narrator has NO idea what they're doing, they don't even know the basics of their society.
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