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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Balance - Chapter 4.1

    Hi, pretzelsing here, doing your promised review. I will try to keep the tips that you had in mind and be and have a critical eye while reading.I am jumping ...

    Jan 20, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Patchworld 5

    Okay, heya satira, this is pretzelsing here for a review: First of all I promise not to nitpick but here are my points that I want to touch Here is ...

    Jan 19, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Deception's Blade - Chapter Five (Interval)

    Hello,pretzelsing here for a review, I really the sense of anticipation in your whole story. It was warriors waiting before a battle mood and I personally liked it.Here are my ...

    Jan 19, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Deception's Blade - Chapter Four (edited)

    Hello, this is pretzelsing here for a review, I really liked the air of uncertainty that your writing had. Eona was unsure doing the whole story and you showed that ...

    Jan 15, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Action / Adventure Re: This Thing of Mine - Chapter One

    Hi,pretzelsing here for a review I like this story,although I was totally reading it out of context so I am just warning you about that. I generally thought that your ...

    Jan 15, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » General, Action / Adventure Re: Phoenix Inferno 5pt2

    Hello this is pretzelsing here for a review, a friend of your sister, ThereseCricket Throughout this book, you build up suspense that lasts throughout the whole chapter. You had me ...

    Jan 14, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » General, Teen Fiction Re: Perspective - the beginning of my novel....maybe?

    Hello, pretzelsing here for a review, Overall, I liked how you wrote this story from two different and opposite perspectives of the twins. I will nitpick but I also want ...

    Jan 13, 2015
  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Fanfiction Re: Jackie's smile

    Okay,hi this is pretzelsing, I like how throughout this story there was suspense that filled it but I am also seeing some minor and major problems and mistakes so I ...

    Jan 13, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Wool of the Prince-- Chapter 42

    Hello,pretzelsing here for a review,! I jumped into the middle of the story so this story is out of context and a little bit confusing to me but please just ...

    Jan 12, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Secret of the One-Chapter 5.1

    Hello, pretzelsing here for a review, I really truly liked this chapter of your story. I have not been following your book or the general plot line events so I ...

    Jan 12, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » General, Fantasy Re: Adonia, Beloved // Chapter Three

    Hello this is pretzelsing for a review here: I have a question, I think that this time span is too short. During one week Adonia already feels well enough to ...

    Jan 10, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Adonia, Beloved // Chapter Two

    Hello pretzelsing here for a review of your chapter 2, I really liked your story and how you showed Adonia's depression, gradually throughout this story. I agree with the others, ...

    Jan 10, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Adonia, Beloved // Chapter One

    Hi pretzelsing here for a review, Hello,I was recommended by a friend of mine to do your third chapter, because it was lonely and had only one review. Overall, I ...

    Jan 9, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: j

    Hello, this is pretzelsnow here for a review: I really liked the descriptive lines in this paragraphs. Here are a couple good and bad things that I noticed: In this ...

    Jan 9, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Syrin: Essential Fire - Chapter 4

    Hello this is pretzelsing here for a review(I changed my username, I am the former pretzelsnow) I really like the suspense here in this story.I was literally holding my breath ...

    Jan 8, 2015


We shall not cease from exploration, and the end of all our exploring will be to arrive where we started and know the place for the first time.
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