Portable_Jukebox

Hello, I thought I would pop by and give a quick critique here. As always, if you have any questions about the following critique or want someone to bounce ideas ...

Hey, I really like the premise of the story. Yes, the whole psychic dealing with life and her visions has been done before, but I think you have some ideas ...

OK, overall this piece had a strong emotional pull. I could see what was happening, I could almost feel it. Howerer, there were a couple mistakes and areas in need ...

I liked this. It took me a couple reads, but it grew on me. "Like the houses I used to draw and crawl inside to hide," is probably my favorite ...

I liked this a lot. You used the repetition correctly. You made quick, simple connections that made your argument real and very current. I loved that. However, the poem didn't ...

Like you, I am not quite sure what this is, but to me, that didn't really matter. It was fantastic. I could feel the emotion. I could see the scenes. ...

The main issue I had with this piece was that it was very difficult to read, and not in a good way. The narration made no sense. It was disjointed, ...

Hey, I loved it, and that is actually saying something. I'm really picky about my poetry, but your poem hit all the right notes. I could feel and hear the ...

Very well done and finely written. I felt like the character was telling me the story himself. There were however a few maladies with the writing. Most of those were ...

Interesting beginning, I have to say. The main problems I saw were that your sentences sound a bit choppy sometimes and a few don't make that much sense. These problems ...