Pompadour

Hi, hi. I'm typing this out on a phone so please ignore typos/odd letterage. The one issue that stands out here is that some pills are a bit large to ...

Hey there. I like the title you've picked for the novel--it's pretty neat. That said, I'm not a fan of prologues unless they're very-much necessary and very well-written, and I ...

Hi, hi! Here for a Review Day review~ I don't have anything to mention, actually, for this chapter aside for a few scruples I had with Arianna's character. I love ...

Hey. Happy Review Day! First off, this chapter needs an 18+ rating for language. That aside, it'd help if the syntax were to vary from the subject + verb + ...

Hola, Moony~ Happy Review Day! It looks like I always get to these chapters during RD, huh? I should probably aim to catch up with more chapters today. >.> 'Wherever ...

Yo. Happy Review Day~ I dig this. You have some really lovely images coupled with great word-choice in some places. I'm a bit tetchy about the line-by-line capitalisation, because even ...

Hello there~ The idea in itself, of an institute for reapers, is fascinating. It's also quite original, because no one would be willing to take classes to become a reaper ...

Hullo. Gonna keep this succinct. You've got some pretty neat imagery rolling here. My personal favourite is probably ''you reach under the cardboard flaps of pandora's rib cage &//pull out ...

Hi~ You have a lovely writing style; the atmosphere that the first chapter is building towards is startlingly pretty. It's very much like the clouds the chapter begins with, in ...

I should be studying, but what the heck. Let's roll. The problem I see here is more structural than anything else. Your line-breaks are a tad off, and--this is more ...

So my brother bought a set of dominoes the other day and my deprived childhood watched, completely unabashed, when I spent all day 'playing' with them. It's actually quite fascinating ...

Hi~ One of the issues I had with this piece was that it starts out seeking to accomplish something, and the idea that it means to convey is strongest nearing ...

Hi. I think, at this point, this stands as too vague an entryway into a novella, and too vague a short story to stand on its own. There is some ...

Back, back! I haven't read any of the previous reviews so forgive me if I repeat anything~ There are a couple more tense-shifts in this chapter, 'Rora. Read through it ...

Axe body spray is quite possibly the most 'yeuch'-worthy thing on this planet. D: I'm sorry; I needed to say that. I haven't read any of the previous reviews, so ...