Poltergiest

Hi! Okay, it was really good like the other ones. Anyway, first of all I loved the conversation between the two guards. (Funny). BTW, I'm almost possitive that darts work ...

Well thats great! Kill off your main charatcer in the first few paragraphs! But other than that it was really good. Very descriptive. Now I'm wondering if the assasigns were ...

It was really good. It made me feel empty... Which is good for me! You suprised me with the Skywalker thing at the end. Were you talking about Mara Jade? ...

There, I read it, now I'm criting. See!!! Anyway, It was good. I like how you explained about the branch thing and the large pockets. Thank you. I thought it ...

Okay, now I feel bad for not reading it before. I'm gonna try and crit but there wasn't really anything. First, shouldn't it be in fnafiction? Just a thought, anyway... ...

RRRRAAAAAAHHHHH!!!!! I love this story, and for no aperent reason. Your gonna have to get this thing published or else. But not really, yes publish but not the threat. Oh, ...

I saw your story and had to crit. *Hooray, your back* Huh, unusually phyced about that. Hmm... Well, it was short but sweet. I missed out on a few and ...

First of all I thought it was really well done. I liked the short scene with the spirit and Brad. The only thing is I imagined the mist being thick ...

First of all, :cry: . I feel so bad for poor Brad. (Ryhm not intended). It was so uncool of his friends to totally abandon him like that. Oh well, ...

Horay! I'm off grounding! Horay! YWS is back up! Horay! I read your story! Horay! Ok, sorry to say but this is the first I've read of your story execpt ...

:shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: Ok, I'll abmit it, I didn't read it. :cry: Ok I Have to tell you. Theres such a thing as paragraphs. Not ...

Really good. An original idea, I think. Anyway, I want to know more about what they are. Try and find another word instead of creatures. Like... Well... Just say what ...

I haven't read any of your other stuff but this was really good. I was a bit confused but that kinda comes when you start reading the end of a ...

That last part was pretty freakin sudden! But it was still pretty cool. I like Ghent, even though he is kindof a jerk. I was gonna say a different word ...

Really amazing. It actually had me holding my breath, kinda... But really, I would liek to read the rest, even though yoy probably already posted it and I just haven't ...