Pippiedooda

Hello again :) great chapter as always! Salth stood, Hawk a bare instant behind him, and ran to the door to tend to the unconscious Sangra Instead of 'stood' I'd ...

Hello :D! I'm really glad you posted the next chapter, it doesn't seem so rough to me! Hawk with his dagger and Salth with his battleaxe ready to throw I'm ...

Hi! :D As always, this part was really funny :P Although you said it needed a bit of a trim I can't really see much that could be perfected! I'll ...

:D I think you have edited well again here! I liked the inclusion at the beginning of her wanting to get back to her room :) Just a few tiny ...

Hi! :D I really enjoyed this part! I agree with the previous comments but here are some more ;) when someone knocked on the front door. I’d maybe instead have ...

Hi! :D I love reading this, I really do. Each part makes me laugh, right now I am typing with a grin on my face. Great work! Blink. It sounded ...

Hi again! :D I think you have edited brilliantly- I really loved the changes!! I noticed a couple of little things but in general this is a big improvement :) ...

Hello again :) Only just saw this was up sorry! I'm understanding the story a lot more now and I love how you have kept the funny side to your ...

Hi sorry it took me so long to review this! I wasn't here at the weekend and didn't have enough time Monday then my computer broke Tuesday! Grrr :( I ...

Back! Right here come the nitpicks :D I think Medowlark and Dudette covered a lot of them and I agree with the points they have made, but I have a ...

Hi me again :) I really like the changes you have made! Definite improvement, I can visualise the conversation loads more and the movement between different sets is much less ...

How can I decline when I'm on of those selected to be a little dwarf elder? :D That's the best position one can reach! I've noticed some more things- Hitting ...

Hi me again! :) I really like what you have added about the creepy middle aged guys- its actually so true as well :P I noticed a couple more things ...

Woops sorry :oops: meant to say 'their head' sorry about that! I thought that it would be better to say they and their as you have already referred to them ...

Hi me again again :D I like how you have continued with this! Really good ending to this part too- although sad :( on with the review :) Like I ...