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Re: Why I believe in God.
I'm afraid I disagree. You say "Western bastardisation", but you must realise that language plays a significant role in the mental processes. It is completely impossible to follow the exact ...
Jan 27, 2014 -
Re: Framework
I took a step towards the glowering stars overhead I'm not sure glowering is the word you want. It means frowning or glaring. My heart was quiet, except for the ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: Rejection
Honestly, I can't think of any nitpicks because I was too busy relating.I feel the same, but the guy has no idea I exist. I think this was very easily ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Dearly Beloved
This is....unbelievably amazing. The only thing I would change is when we find out he's mad. It's very sudden and you don't use enough detail, I think. But other than ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Magi {Ch.8} Part 2
Alright, now you just have to write more. Keep me updated!
Feb 12, 2011 -
Re: "Ballerina" The first Chapter (edited)
Ummm, is this a fanfic? Because I may as well be reading Marie dancing...
Jan 31, 2011 -
Re: Destiny prolouge
I'm honestly not sure what to say. It seems really interesting, and you do say Alexander's name a lot. I think it does have a lot of potential, so i'll ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Staying Down
Hi! I liked this a lot, and I'm being a "good person". But maybe we should call you Tara now...Just kidding. Sometimes I felt like it didn't flow right, maybe ...
Jan 1, 2011 -
Re: Boys Next Door Chapter One
Ok, quick question. Who is Adam? I'm guessing he's Mike and Tyler's older brother. I he Josh's best friend? or both?
Dec 11, 2010 -
Re: Just another broken heart in the sand
That totally reminds me of a dream I had. It still haunts me. I don't really know poetry, but I'll try my best. I'm pretty sure it wasn't met to ...
Dec 5, 2010 -
Re: My life according to school
Nope, it's Zoey's kid from reality store.
Dec 4, 2010 -
Re: The Cherry Code - Chapter Three - The Unexpected Company
It was really good. The only thing I want to know more about is Astor. What is his relationship with Amiria? Other than that, I couldn't think of anything else, ...
Nov 30, 2010 -
Re: Hazel- chapter 2
Truth- Thanks, I ran it through word, but that doesn't fix everything. "There was no picture, and Hazel was almost happy. What would she do if she found out that ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Hazel- chapter 1
ok. I ran it through spellcheck, so it should be better now. The reason she takes her away over cabbage is because thats how the original story kind of went. ...
Nov 25, 2010 -
Re: The Spirit Vampire - Chapter One
Hi, I just have one problem. We knoow nothing about Ally. Her personality isn't really developed, and we have no idea what so ever about what she looks like. Other ...
Nov 21, 2010