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:D Will correct those!

Confidence booster! :P Thanks

Alright, I'll make sure not to overdo that on the next piece!

Edited to match your suggestions. Take a look at it now...(sing that along to the song) Thanks for the review!

Thanksee! :D Any particular part of this which is no good? Is the dialogue ok?

Oops didn't notice the double startle! Skin and bones is the MC's mind version of his older self. I will edit te desperation to the later parts. Also, I'm debating ...

Nice!

Thanky!

Ok, I was indeed beaten to the review! Nice review Aley!

Thanks, will just say here that I seem to have too much description in some areas and too little in others, and I'll have to work on that. Also, I ...

Thanks, but due to the 2000 word limit I had to leave the description of the fire for the next part! :) I have it written out in my mind ...

Thanks. Yup I should be making some of those changes. Regarding "Cease does it..." I wanted it to be a slightly awkward reminiscent of Yoda, so... Regarding the first and ...

Simply put: someone's got talent. Put it to music, boy.

Feature this...feature this...feature this...

How do I add spoilers? It doesn't seem to work for me :(