Phoenixfire

Awesome awesome awesome. Really, a very good poem. Loved rhythm, rhyme, and concept. The only thing that bothered me a little was the lack of capitalization (so I'm a freak). ...

It was good. The fact that you were very grounded in an emotion, whether it was real or not, made the poem that much better. I've seen this emotion in ...

Short and sweet. Very nice. I think the edits were a good move. Points for originality on the "lemon juice" reference. Too often writers choose to resort to clichés because ...

It's a great topic, and the words are good, but I think it flows a little funny. I might be biased, though, because I tend to like either completely free ...

I like it. I also like that I don't have to get it. It sounds like an echo, circling around and going nowhere. Great stuff. I disagree with some others, ...

You have managed the indescribable feat of making a poem that is at once both creepy and profound. I don't know whether to congratulate you or worry about you. Oh, ...

I like it. The first thing I noticed was that it was the opposite of my writing. Focusing on the inevitability of the sunrise is an interesting focal point...I tend ...

It would be tedious to repeat the previous, so I won't. Oops. I don't know if I like the last stanza, but I do like My thoughts dwell in attics ...

Have you read my 'Broken'? It's a little similar in theme. Not motivation, though. I'm just come up with depressing poetry for whatever reason. :-) Sorry about your friend.

I really like this poem. Knowing this character and his storyline adds a neat element to reading it. The only thing I would add would be a rhyming line at ...