PhoenixXander

It's a really nice piece. The second line is missing the other quotations it needs! I think it needs to be a little longer, it needs more details about how ...

I like how this is a sad poem about alcohol, it's different, unique. The whole first stanza just sounds scary, like that boy is sick. Like the hollow cheeks thing, ...

This is a very nice poem. It's one of those where when you read it you can think of multiple scenarios for the back story. It's a rather sad poem, ...

This is different from what I expected from a poem about the first day of summer! Very unique, I expect all kinds of similes and metaphors about the sun or ...

I like what this is about, what message you are trying to send, it's a very good message. I feel like this is a message that we see everyday, and ...

I didn't get to read all of this because I won't have a computer for too long but, I just couldn't help but say the description in the first part ...

Well, that's a pretty dark poem. I like how it begins with "If I die tonight..." for the first three stanzas, and then it turns into it being every other ...

Your word choice is good, in the ninth paragraph (I think they're paragraphs) you used the word "lurched", and that's an interesting word that I haven't seen in awhile. The ...

I like the nature descriptions, especially "...the fields below steady..." in the last stanza. Your way of being descriptive flows with the poem well, overall. I wonder if you could ...

I really like the verse that says "God thought Satan to be beautiful, until an hour before he fell.", it really brings out the sort of darkness in the poem. ...