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Phoenix again. For part three :elephant: A while later I finished . Before this and after the I began say I told Death everything that had happened in the Cave. ...

Phoenix her to do the next review. I see there is only one review to this so I'll nit pick unlike last time. After the meeting was over I went ...

Hey Phoenix here. I noticed that the 3rd and fourth part to this haven't been commented on so I decided to come and read the first parts to give a ...

Each drop creates harmony with our heart beating. hearts unless you meant there so in love their hearts beat as one. If that be the case you should probably put ...

Hello Phoenix here to review. So the story has a nice feel to it, and I believe you used a point of view that works for the situation. So here ...

His eyes moved to the various people surrounding the body. Some had their eyes widened with shock while others remain impassive. remained I believe “I deserve this do I?” he ...

Phoenix here to review It’s six o’clock in the morning. That alarm is anything but what I want to hear after just getting in just a few hours ago. My ...

Crash. try not to start with Sounds. She was an elegant, bronze-skinned damsel, so to speak. “I-I’m so sorry.” I don't like damsel. What modern day boy considers a girl ...

Hey I'm here to review your story. At first I started getting frustrated with the lack of information. You piled up many questions and didn't answer them, but at the ...

. Signaling me to create something out of nothing. Out of paper and pencil. Something that will help These two sentences kind of negate each other. Either have it out ...

I liked it better until they got to the arena, because that was repetitive and predictable. The first half, with the political repercussions of her actions was good, but the ...

Phoenix here with a review Her hair was one half shimmering summer and one half whispering autumn What exactly does that mean. I'm assuming it means her hair is redish ...

Hey, Phoenix here to do your review Any and all suspensions pending expulsion were accompanied with pages of information, most of it useless hearsay. Some accusations, a handful of rumors… ...

Hey I'm Phoenix here to give you a review. The summer holidays in New York were over and the new school year has just begun. It was another rainy day ...

Engrossed in his music, he did not realize how far he had come from the town. Suddenly, his car started giving jerks and then stopped. Show don't tell, what sounds ...