Published January 28, 2010
It rains. I have opened my window again. I listen to the rhythm of the raindrops. They play the rhythm of our love. Each drop creates harmony with our heart beating. They play our rhythm. I have run much today. I have run like an insane to you. Getting more insane when I feel your smell in the rain! I run towards you harder. Turned to the right and ran, then turned to the left and ran again. I don’t know where you are, but I run!
Have to sleep. It seems I’ve run much. But have to keep the window open. Feel our music! As I closed my eyes you appeared in front of me. Seems I have got much tired of running, that’s why I see dreams as soon as I close my eyes. There is only you and me in my dream. This is our film. Only me and you. Voice director: rain, director: my eyes, starring: you and me. Our screenplay has not been written beforehand and we will write it, sentence by sentence, word by word. And the producer is my brain. Making our film according to our senses, according to our heart, according to our wishes. Seems I slept much... But our film will continue. Every night there will be more excited episodes. How do you think, was it interesting today?
It was still raining. It was pouring more strongly. Angels too were pouring tears to our film. The rain that brought me your smell last night brought me your voice too. I hear it… Yes, I hear. Look, the drop fell onto the ground on left side said it… drop fell on that leaf of the tree in the right repeated. I hear your voice. All drops whisper the words of "I Love You" to my ear. Words that make me stunned…
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hearts unless you meant there so in love their hearts beat as one. If that be the case you should probably put that in somehow.
Like an insane person. I think that sounds better.
Getting more insane when I feel your smell in the rain!You can't feel a smell they are two different senses.
Really good.
exciting
Cut that more strongly the pouring implies that.
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My personal opinion say you should put you after I hear at the end.
good
but this ending needs to be strengthened. As it is it seems there is more. Some how maybe repeat the comparison of their love to film.