PhoenixBishop

Phoenix lands for a review. She held the hand of a small child, looking back to make sure the girl was keeping up. Wait if she was holding her hand, ...

Phoenix lands for a review She felt soft quakes that plagued the cold rock floor beneath her feet. This sounds awkward I suggest replacing the plagued. The pulse made her ...

Phoenix lands to review I like it but I think the rhyme scheme is a bit overly simplistic. It seems like you just wanted it to rhyme. Like the land ...

Phoenix lands for a review. Well there is not much I can say that hasn't already been said. All I can say is that you're amazing at imagery a pattern ...

Phoenix lands for a review Whether we meant well matters not After all, who would believe us? This a bit confusing. Meant well at doing what? And who is there ...

Phoenix lands for a review Making it water, sun, and any other damage that could come to it resistant. It was perfect for my job , I think you can ...

Phoenix lands for a review Still, the mere thought of being involved in something illegal sent waves of paranoia seeping through his veins, as it did into the rest of ...

Phoenix lands to review Interesting. It had a nice flow only a few times was it interrupted by a few lines that confused me a bit. Like this. Saccharine smiles ...

Phoenix lands for a review. Really all I have to say is grammar. I mean I'm by no means an expert but what I omit I honestly don't see. This ...

Phoenix lands for a review. “ At her state, death is a gift to her. She needs to live with what she’s done.” In seems like it would work better. ...

Phoenix lands for a review. Phoenix lands for a review. she want to be home instead of there were he was wanted A boy sat in the back and stared ...

Phoenix lands to review. What We Are I don't see the difference between this and a chapter but oh well. A booming voice awoke him, throwing him from his desk ...

Phoenix lands to review. But I hear them giggling, feel there glares their "There goes the goth" they say to each other and they giggle This part seems a bit ...

Phoenix lands to review. The room was crammed full and cold; crammed full of what? People I assume but I shouldn't have to assume. quote] I got up to get ...

Phoenix lands for a review. Those who watch us stare, And those who know us giggle. They taunt us with being there And haunt our affections. This one seems a ...