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I love this story. Poor Ezra just can't get a break. You're awesome for writing this. ^.^ I'm only critiquing Chapters/Part VI-VII because all the others have been done. By ...

Aw, poor Ezra! I love this story. As my proof, I was overly excited when Millie mentioned that Ezra needed a girl's name and, with gobs of enthusiasm and gushing, ...

I'm impressed. This is a good, well written story. In a short amount of time, you made me care (or at least curious) about the characters, gave enough info about ...

One more thing before I allow you to read! I know this has A LOT of grammar things and needs WORK! So, harsh reviews is highly recommended! You ask and ...

I agree with Phorcys and Zankoku_na_Tenshi. This is quite enjoyable and has a definite Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy feel to it (and I haven't read the books!) It sounds ...

While I never got even halfway through Eldest , I've heard that Paolini's glorious atheist elves ragged on religion and gods a lot. So I think it's more likely that ...

Most of your outline sounds good. However, a few parts were Twilight -esque, like a lot of girls loving Henry while he'll have nothing to do with them, and Henry ...

I read these books in January/February, and I'm obsessed with them. However, many aspects of the series bother and infuriate me. Especially Bella. My issues with Bella: My major issue ...

He sank into his vintage arm chair. Red in color it was a gift from his late father. He sank into his red vintage arm chair, a gift from his ...

Seriously, dat was gud. ^-^ I can't find any problems with it. Maybe something to complain about, but I'd have to get really picky then. The annoying sort of picky, ...

This is really good! It's poetic and nicely done. Two issues of mine: [it wasn't quite, i remember the music, i remember...i do...] Do you mean to say "quiet"? Like ...

I think I cried a little when Snape and Fred died. I know I shed a few tears when Harry told his son Albus Severus that he was named after ...

This is a good start. There are some mistakes and issues with structure and getting us to connect to the characters sooner, but I'm sure you can hammer them out. ...

This is pretty good. Some intriguing info is given that makes you wonder what's going to happen, because it seems like a bit of this info will be important to ...

This sounds interesting. Intriguing. Your description of wolves is wonderful. However, it does need some major work. The way you word your first bit of dialogue is weird. I accepted ...