Periwinkle

I. NITPICKS “Eighteen, shouldn’t you be in school then? It’s Thursday night!” I replied. I’d always been a rule-abiding child and teenager. There wasn’t much to complain about when I ...

Review for a Review! I. NITPICKS The way his head slammed against the wall shook the two onlookers. It cracked loudly but he didn’t acknowledge the pain. That’s what scared ...

I. NITPICKS I’m wasn't sure what the time was as I headed down the dark streets. It must have been late. Admittedly, I was a little drunk. That’s why I ...

I. Showing vs. Telling THE FIRST DAY OF SCHOOL. I thought to myself with a sense of dread . My name is Louis Nightshine. I'm your typical 13 year old ...

"I don't need an answer," I whispered terrified. I think a comma goes after whispered. I squeezed my eyes shut tighter, and clenched my fists until my knuckles were white. ...

I. NITPICKS “Ms. Charna[b]. " “Huh?” “Ms. Charna! Were you sleeping in my class again?” “No Mr. Heklin.” “Ms. Charna come up to the front of the class please.” I ...

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I. NITPICKS I sat down at the computer and mashed the button that turned it on. The little blue light flickered twice before blinking on and the whirring noises of ...

I. NITPICKS Sitting up quickly, Satu found herself disoriented. After a few minutes, she recalled reading the fairy tale book, and she wondered what time it was. Twelve forty eight ...

Okay...I'm here to review. I. NITPICKS The random bleep of items being scanned echoed through the large, marble-tiled grocery store. Shopping carts rattled and wove in the aisles. Satu lazily ...

I. NITPICKS “Ms. Caldwell ," the professor called her name, “Would you mind telling the class what the formula for force is?” She asked. “Ummm…I think it’s m = m ...

I. NITPICKS By the time the street lamps sputter on and dimly light the sidewalks, every person is either home or in the pubs for the rest of the night. ...

I. NITPICKS He popped in out of thin air as the girl slept. One of her hands was over her neck as she slept on her side. She knew of ...

I. NITPICKS She glanced at her sisters, who were bent over their net, studiously intent on their task. She looked back at the red-faced beardeman in front of her. He ...

I. NITPICKS "Run away! Emily, you know you should, your life is horrible. Run away from your worries. From your terrible class mates, from your mom. Running away will solve ...