Pentavalence

Hiya! Penta here with a review. First off, I love the concept! Ravens are always portrayed as 'bad' or 'evil', so it was nice to see something different. Now, on ...

Hi! Penta here with a review :) First off, Welcome to YWS! It takes a lot of courage to post your writing, and I really liked this piece. The characters ...

Hi, Penta here with a review. "As I drive to school the sights were the same, dead useless tumble weeds on the side of the road, the dry cracked desert ...

Hi! Penta here. So, this is pretty good. The writing is interesting--a little confused, at some parts, but then again, so is the character. Still, there were times where you ...

Heya, Pentavalence here. I really like this and I'm hesitant to criticize it, but here are a couple quick things. The last line seems like a dedication: if it is, ...

Hi, Pentavalence here with a review. Honestly, I don't have a lot to criticize about this. The writing's elegant, refined, professional. It's a realistic, (albeit slightly dark) version of what ...

Hi, Pentavalence here. I hate to say it, but this piece didn't really evoke any emotion in me. The story is sad, I get that, but there's no real feelings. ...

Hi, Pentavalence here with a review. Here's the thing about prologues: a lot of authors include them where they're unnecessary, and load a bunch of random information on readers. I ...

Wow. Okay, Pentavalence here with a review. This is a well written story with a highly realistic character. And THE ENDING. That was a plot twist! A couple things that ...

Hi StormCycle! Penta here with a review. I have to admit, the first paragraph turned me off a little bit. Characters should never be perfect; remember that your characters are ...

Hey! Pentavalence here. Okay, this is a pretty interesting story. Right off you have giant evil kittens and a thought-reading game, which is a fascinating concept. Here are a couple ...

Hey StormCycle, Pentavalence here. I liked this story! Brief yet powerful descriptions, well thought out characters, excellent dialogue. You might want to consider not using the word "faction", becaus

Okay, Pentavalence here. This is a great concept, but I feel like you do a lot of telling rather than showing, and also an unnecessary amount of detail. I think ...

Hey, Pentavalence here. Really nice job! I found myself literally holding my breath in excitement for some of it. In just 1500 words you made me feel deeply for these ...

Hey, Pentavalence here with a review. This is an interesting story. It's got dark themes, but it's also from an eleven-year-old's point of view, and she might not be able ...