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Yo! Why did you repeat the whole end of the last chapter at the beginning of this chapter? Also, why are you letting him out after minutes of time? Like, ...

Heylo! Ironically, it is now super weird to have so much sudden description, you haven’t described anyone else at all, why are you taking so long to describe these guys? ...

Back again! “And just for you, Kira, I’m adding that Eben’s life is also at stake.” This doesn’t make sense, he needs Eben because he’s the lock, he wouldn’t at ...

Hi for the next one! but his journey had taken less than an hour and he still had to wait on the squad bringing Seth in from the gypsy settlement. ...

Hey! Oh man, this is going to be a complete info dump, isn’t it? Right now we’ve had three paragraphs of info dump. Awkward info dump as well – do ...

Howdy! Straight into it, I think; How do you smile empathetically? Empathy is to feel for someone similar feelings to what they are feeling. Sympathy, on the other hand, is ...

Hullo there! To begin with; I am interested in what you have here, interested enough to keep reading it, certainly, you obviously have a concept of plot you want to ...

Hi Nia, So this is obviously beautiful and I am thankful again that you are branching out and doing more things, different things with your poetry, finding new words and ...

Nia ♥ This is beautiful and I think it's very good. It has that sense of tone and structure which I think you've been playing more with recently. You're skilled ...

Hi Chelsmoe! I like what you're doing here, the idea of introspection at 3am isn't a new idea, but I always love to read what people are doing and how! ...

Omnomnomiyus! I noticed this sitting with only one review and decided I absolutely MUST come by and say hello and give it my delicate touch of delicateness. Yes. Really, though, ...

Hi Bolt via Yoda, I can really super feel the emotion in this poem! I'm sorry you didn't have the points to post it because, wow, it's really good and ...

Hi KittyBee, I think you have an interesting poem here, it's obvious you have strong feelings for Florida and the way you've written this shows you want to expound of ...

Hi there! I like what you’re doing here, talking about the moon/night without actually mentioning the moon at all, it’s an interesting concept. I've pointed out the spelling/language mishaps I ...

Hi Unicorn! I love poems about time, there's something about them which always appeals to me, maybe it's because I love to procrastinate? ;) I think that when I look ...