A Love Poem from Bolt to Pickle

This review is for Bolt obviously.

This is simple, sweet, unique and creative. I am glad you wrote it because it is simply silly. I think it could be a little more carefully written though. For example, "My love for you has been pickled," could have been said better in my opinion. Although changing too much of this poem will make it take too much of a serious approach as your audience is picking up this sort-of unique creative voice that takes to not making much sense and also, exemplifying a kids approach to poetry. That's not a bad thing- kids love poetry and older fokes like myself can find this kind of poetry refreshing.

I would suggest to write some reviews and contribute more to the YWS. It is good to give back as much as you put in to the YWS. Not to say you haven't but just write a couple reviews so we can credit you better as an author!

Thanks for writing and being a writer.

Your hero,
ImHero

So it is an interesting statement, that a pickle is like tears, never spoiled, very tasty, sad, and salty, but I'm getting caught up on some of the middle lines. For instance, pickles are cucumbers which have been pickled, so to say that pickles are ripe for pickling is actually to say that the cucumber is ripe for pickling, right? So what this poem says to me, is that a pickled pickle, is ripe for pickling, ready to be pickled again. This is bothersome because I don't think pickles can be pickled multiple times with much success. However, the other alternative is that they are so ripe 'from' pickling.
This is another thing that catches me up because I never really think of pickles as ripe. When I think of ripe, I either think fresh off the vine, which pickles are fresh out of the brine, or ripe as in bad. 'The ripe old age of 90 something.'
Moving on, the inconsistency of your use of capitals and lower case is something I would personally avoid in my poetry, but it seems to work alright here. With your opening line, Pickle becomes a name instead of the food source, but having You capitalized in the next line makes me wonder when you do not capitalize the rest of the lines. However, You is almost the start of the next statement, and without the punctuation to tell, I can only guess that is why it is capitalized.

Pickle is YWS user? This poem works both ways XD

Wow. This is the sweetest thing anyone has ever done for me... I see you have feelings for me Yoda, but I wasn't sure until now.

I love you too..

Hi Bolt via Yoda,

I can really super feel the emotion in this poem! I'm sorry you didn't have the points to post it because, wow, it's really good and I'd love to see more of this from you. I do want to know why you haven't added any punctuation? I know it's usually a stylistic choice but I think it would have helped me read this poem as you had truly intended.

You use repetition really well, I didn't even get tired of seeing "pickle", but I wonder why you went the horrible way of rhyme in your second and third last lines, rhyme is just gross, don't you know. It also got pretty dark there, toward the end. You might want to consider creating a reason for this sudden, dark turn. It's not that I don't really appreciate your range of emotion - you're like the actor of poetry right now - I just think that maybe you could have given me a reason, some context to that excellent shift in emotional value.

All in all, I thank you both for posting this. I'm pretty stunned, it's much better than I've written in months!

yes i agree 100%

i am not being blackmailed for sure