Pendragon

The first thing I noticed was how uncomfortable it was. It felt like I fell asleep on a bed of rough rocks and laid there for hours. I opened my ...

Here is my revised version of Chapter 1 Part 1. I squinted in the bright sunlight and looked around. The Anthros of the Fox Village went around with their business, ...

I decided not to end the chapter here I'm adding onto it and will have more on this chapter posted.

It's a good story, and think you should keep the names. I agree with Writersdomain sugestions, but it is still a good story.

I originaly used italics but they didn't transfer with my story, but what looks like speech should be in italics. Sorry for the confusion.

Anything that lloks like speech. The italics i was using for speech on my writing program didn't transfer. The italics are thought sppech so no one is confused.