PaperMoon

Evi, Ignore dogs. I like what you're trying to do here, the exploration of the color palette in relation to emotional connections. Very clever. The length of the poem doesn't ...

Okay, I don't think it's stylistic and I'm surprised I'm the first to catch it, but you misspelled 'slowly,' twice. Dark is messed up as well. Don't worry about it ...

Hey, So I don't think I've ever posted to you before....here's to the first. Anyway, I think that if you're going to write a short and simple poem it has ...

Hello, hello, Well its been awhile since I've posted and even when I did I don't think I was ever to great at it. Nevertheless I shall try my best. ...

Hm...well kudos on the Old English style. I also wrote a poem in such a style, Bloom of the Rose, you should check it out. I'm curious as to your ...

Wow... I see you've been "critiqued" for being cliche, but there's a sincerity and...I don't...skill to your word use and structure that brings the work to a whole new level. ...

Hmm...well I noticed you kept a relevant iambic pentameter until the last stanza, add some syllables so it's a coherent work. I thought your reference of the sun loving the ...

how come it's called idiotic boyfriend if it's about a girl? :P Haha, just kidding, I think before I speak and read before I write (I read June's post). So ...

I first want to thank you for your bubbling review, it brightened my day. I also want to thank you for allowing me to use one of my words: chiasmata, ...

Hey, It's nice to see your work up and available. A writer reveals themselves through their writing, so, in that sense, I get to learn a little more about you. ...

Let me first say that as Editor-in-chief of a lit mag. and Copy Editor of the school paper, I read a lot of students' works and submissions. That being said ...

Hmmm... it's nice, reassuring, to find talent in one as young as yourself. Granted skill and age are not connected by any more of a means past our minds, but ...

Hmm... Well I definetely think you have something here with the theme of your poem, it is similar to a poem I recently wrote and posted, Bloom of the Rose, ...

Turtle, I think you have genuine feeling about your topic, but I don't think that's translated in this poem. The repetition of the primary line in each stanza is fine, ...

Hey hey, I know you don't really know me, but you posted on my thread (which I appreciate) and I figure the best way to get to know another is ...