Panikos

Hi, Querencia! Pan here to review. First Impressions It's a solid, interesting opening. Like you said, it's a bit rough around the edges in places, but generally speaking the writing ...

Hi, katesing2016! Pan here to review your work today. First Impressions This is a pretty solid piece, and BlueAfrica is right to compliment your style. You've got a good eye ...

Hi, Wendy. Pan back to review your second chapter, even though the tag didn't work. Next time you tag someone, you should make a wall post and put the tags ...

Hi, Lightsong! Nitpicks Gael inspected the patient single-layered green cloth he wore. It hurt. 1) Are you trying to say that the cloth is specifically worn by people in the ...

Hi, wendylau98! I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. First Impressions I like the idea behind this piece. The premise intrigued me; I haven't read much literature about ...

Hi, Lightsong! Let's get straight to it. Nitpicks Felaris wanted to interrogate Arafel’s remaining friends - Bardel and Zefos, but Seya was adamant that wouldn’t happen. Tiny grammar nitpick. You ...

Hi, Justlittleoleme2! Pan back to review again. First Impressions I loved this chapter! It's much stronger than the first one and definitely above what I expected. I'm particularly impressed with ...

Hi, Dragon! Nitpicks “You want us to destroy a lab. Why use ten words where one will do?” Fox said, almost with annoyance. “ Moving on , will you be ...

Hi, fantasywestern! I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. First Impressions As may be clear from my like, I really loved this. It's got its flaws and it ...

Hi, Justlittleoleme2! I'm Pan and I'll be frying up a review for you today. First Impressions Solid opening. It held my interest, and I always love reading about worlds where ...

Hi, Lightsong. Nice to have a new instalment so soon after the last one! Nitpicks and Minor Points They had been following Hazir, one of Arafel’s best friends and had ...

Hey, Lightsong! Nitpicks As she entered the balcony How is she entering a balcony? They're normally just little platforms leading out from windows or doors, so I don't see how ...

Hi, Lightsong. Back again to review. Let's get straight to it and see if I can crack the 170 mark tonight. Nitpicks Ilami scrunched her nose as she walked through ...

Hi, Papillote. I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. I haven't read any of the previous chapters, so I do apologise if I comment on anything that's irrelevant ...

Hi, Dragon! Back again to review. First Impressions The improvements keep on coming. I'm super pleased to see that your chapters are getting longer and better paced, as well as ...