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Hi, DemonGoddess. Pan here to review. I'll get straight into the nitpicks, then I'll take the other more general areas - writing style, story content, dialogue, structure, character - section ...

Hi, Dragon. Great to see more of this after such a long break. Nitpicks I cowered in fear behind Crystall Cowering implies fear so strongly that you don't need to ...

Hi, Flumadiddle! Pan back to review. As with last time, I'll get straight to it Nitpicks They both clutched a bottle and a cigarette dangled from their thin lips. This ...

Hi, Lightsong! It's great to see this updated after so long. I've been missing it! Nitpicks ‘It’s time to go,’ Ms. Yera, the Serra-blessed nurse, said, opening the door. I ...

Hi, MJ. Pan here to rustle up a review for you today. I don't normally review fanfiction, but I'm a big Harry Potter nut so I couldn't resist checking this ...

Hi, DemonGoddess. Pan popping in for a quick review. I'm going to take this stanza by stanza and then close up with some overall thoughts. Let's get to it. For ...

Hi, Oniyuri! I hope you're settling in well to YWS. I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. Things I liked 1) First things first, this is a great ...

Hi, Flumadiddle! I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. I'm a bit strapped for time so I'm going to dive straight in with my nitpicks. Nitpicks "Take my ...

Hi, Zoom! Pan here to review your work today. I'll start with the nitpicks. Small Comments That was the first thought to ever enter my mind— or rather, the empty ...

Hi, ashpandas! I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. I've recently started delving into script-writing, so I was drawn to this piece partly to see if I could ...

Hi, Ashley123! I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. First Impressions This was certainly dramatic . It held my attention all the way through, and you certainly create ...

Hi, UnSocialCactus! Welcome to YWS! I hope you're settling in nicely. My name's Pan and I'll be frying up a review for you today. First Impressions I think you've definitely ...

Hi, Querencia! Pan back to review this last part. Nitpicks Elliott made a tiny smile. I don't know about 'making a smile' as a phrase. It just kind of seems ...

Hi, AnonymousPen! Welcome to YWS! I hope you're settling in well. I'm Pan and I'll be frying up a review for you today. First Impressions I can tell you've got ...

Hi, Querencia! Pan back to review. I know I haven't reviewed the second part, but rest assured I have read it, so I am still up to date with everything ...