Panikos

Hi, CreativelyWritten! Pan dropping in for a quick review. As this is so short, I'm going to take this paragraph by paragraph and make comments as I go. “Goddammit!” I ...

Hiya, Querencia. Back again to review! Seated crosslegged in an ancient aqua colored armchair, she was holding up a tarnished mirror. I also think you could switch the tenses around ...

Hi, Querencia. Pan back again for a (hopefully) quick review. Same drill as last time. The last time this creature struck was years ago- we should be safe." Wait, didn't ...

Hi, Querencia! I've been reading your lovely story at a leisurely pace, planning to start reviewing once the other critiques thinned out. But then I thought why wait? The more ...

Hi, Lightsong. This is going to be a shorter review than usual, because my thoughts about this chapter are essentially the same as Mea's: it's unnecessary and doesn't really need ...

Hi, HarshLynx! Pan dropping in for a review - my 250th, in fact. I'm glad to reach such a milestone by critiquing this brilliant piece. Because it is excellent, I'll ...

Hi, Lightsong! Pan dropping in for a quick review. Suggested changes in blue . Nitpicks She gestured to Ilami . ‘Here is the student I have been talking about. Aleveri ...

Hi, BlueAfrica. Pan dropping in for a quick review. Small Comments “Now, why didn’t I do that in the first place instead of screaming my lungs out?” Edna said to ...

Hi, Flumadiddle! Pan dropping in for another quick review. Same drill as usual. Nitpicks He seemed like a toddler, almost. But his eye... eye sockets? Yeah, his eye sockets showed ...

Hi, DemonGoddess. Pan swinging by for a quick review. Seeing as this is so short, I'm going to take it section by section and give you my thoughts on what ...

Hi, Lightsong. Back to review. You know the drill by now. Nitpicks Aleveri sat at one of the benches, facing a book . I get what you mean here, but ...

Hi, Lightsong. I totally thought I'd reviewed this! I can't believe I let this slip by me. I'll rectify it immediately. (Minor changes in blue .) Nitpicks ‘The last time ...

Hi, BlueAfrica! Pan dropping in for a quick review. Small Comments The apartment felt too still and empty, but Edna had sent the children downstairs. I sort of feel like ...

Hi, VictoriaAnderson1230! I'm here to review as promised. Sorry for the wait! I'm going to go through nitpicks first and then close with some overall thoughts, same as I do ...

Hi, 269609! I promised a review and here I am. Let's start with the positives. I feel like this idea has a lot of potential. The concept of people with ...