OrielDoe

Ah, I see. You too!

You're very welcome.

No, no you're fine! I'm just taking in healthy criticism, and every bit of hit helps. I may change the last lines do to the attractiveness in what 'Tay01' had ...

Thank you. :)

Thank you dearly, I did ramble a bit more than I should have. I wrote this poem in a very tough spot of my life. I didn't elaborate too much ...

I love the feel of this segment. The way you used your wording was lovely, and yet almost felt completely tragic. If that's not what you were going for, perhaps ...

I can sense the eerie melancholy, you're great with emotions. Make another!