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Thank you for reading & reviewing! I always get excited to see what people think, both good & bad. I appreciate your suggestions and will definitely fine tune a few ...

Thanks for reading and reviewing! I love your suggestions. And I'm glad your liking the mystery ;) There is a play on words in the title that should give away ...

Thank you for reading and reviewing! It's lovely to have another's perspective. I'm hoping to shape Hunter into a character with a lot more accidental humour and eventually some softness. ...

Thank you for reading & reviewing :) It's greatly appreciated! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far and I'll definitely take your points on board. It's in need of some ...

Darn - I've just seen you edited chapter 1 already! Apologies. I will get to this soon.

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12 (Not going to mark this as a review as I haven’t had much to say!) I think you could take the whole waking up in the morning section out ...

I've just read your revised version & because I think it's so good, I'm not going to leave a review as I think it would be rude to squeeze one ...

Anytime! :D

Of course! So, you could set up a scene with the Zodiac King watching the black hole come closer or become wider day by day. Example; "The King stood vigil ...

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Thanks a bunch! XD! This was the first story I'd written & I'm not sure why I ever stopped to be honest. I guess I find a new idea and ...

I'll post this on my wall! Hopefully you'll get some more reviews. :D

The dialogue confusion is where you introduce Ry back into the setting. You only use 'he' to indicate both Ry & Chins. I would write either "said Chins" or "said ...

PM'd. :D