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A well written extended metaphor. Simple and effective, but too short to be anything but good.

Yay! Off-topicness is great!

"oh, and piece-flooding is generally frowned upon :p" - what flooding?

"Oh, and why is there a rogue apostrophe before "cello"?" - lol, read the previous posts.

Hahahahahaa, oh that's just, lol, hahahaha, it's just so FUNNY! It's not funny.

How about: "She thought she had a death wish, had no life, lived in darkness; he was her light," Cuts out the repetition. As for the content, it's already been ...

I don't think I really explained it, if you can get what I mean... There are some very mixed reviews here, I'm a little lost as to what to change ...

The purpose of this poem is to represent the confusion it is trying to describe but it falls short in the process because it is trying to describe the confusion ...

"are people looking for reasons to hate the guy?" - they're not looking for reasons to hate him because they already do (at least, that's what I've picked up from ...

You further promote an already scarcely followed and erroneous stereotype in an unhumourous way to no effect and scorn the innocent colloquial dialogue of certain people in a way that ...

"Cos it really isn't a common Fantasy convention at all" - it isn't in my experience, maybe I need to read more books. "why is everyone looking for reasons to ...

"If you only put the dots in because it wouldn't let you put an actual indentation, then that is much better" - annoyingly the white font colour does not appear ...

This was inspired by Bach's Prelude to Suite 1 for 'cello. It doesn't exactly follow every note but the rhythms are very much linked to the piece. It is quite ...

Kazmurf: maybe he was referring to realism of the characters' personalities?

"Duh, Harry Potter! Hello, it has MAGIC IN IT" - I can't tell if you're being sarcastic or not but have you read Lord of the Rings?